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An Arranged Marriage - 21


     Ilona awoke under her red quilt, listening to the whisper of rain.  She dressed quickly and hurried outside.  Fires sputtered as women tried to make a hot breakfast.  At the far end of the courtyard was a forest pavilion with a roof and no walls.  Several people gathered there.  Ilona trotted across the ground, her shoes splattering mud on the backs of her legs.

     Horst was standing by a table, studying a map.  Multiple scouts were giving their reports.  Horst looked up and greeted Ilona.  ā€œOnly fair you should hear this, too,ā€ he said, returning his attention to the maps.  ā€œWe’ve lost Detlef.ā€

       Ilona gasped.  ā€œWhat do you mean?  Is he okay?ā€

     Horst answered calmly, his eyes as deep and unfathomable as the sea.  ā€œDerwald men have scattered into the forest, meeting your suitors and putting them through series of tests.  A band of our men were taking Detlef to Lidanah, to have him speak on behalf of a prisoner held unjustly, but the viscount’s guard took him captive.ā€  Horst made eye contact with a red-capped man.

     The red-capped man took up the narration.  ā€œThe guard caught us on the road and attacked without provocation.  They are as wicked as their master.ā€  His eyes crinkled in admiration.  ā€œYou should have seen Detlef fighting with us!  He was a wildcat of a warrior!ā€  Then his face grew serious.  ā€œHe’s been thrown into Lidanah’s dungeon, where the evil viscount continues to test his integrity.ā€  He spat on the ground in disgust.

      ā€œI would rather not leave any man to the mercy of the viscount – especially not Detlef,ā€ Horst said.  ā€œYou heard Knut’s tale of how he rescued Zita, our little wanderer, from the mad wolf.  She is safe in her bed, thanks to him.ā€  He nodded at the red-capped man.  ā€œSee if we can put a plan together to get him out of the dungeon.  We owe him that much.ā€

     Mad wolves?  Fighting guards?  Evil viscounts?  Dungeons?  Ilona clenched her hands and tried not to cry.     

     Horst cleared his throat.  ā€œNow for the others: There’s another man doing quite well, too.  Red-faced boy…doesn’t talk much.  But he has some good metal.  Not to be overlooked.ā€  He ran his finger over the chart.  ā€œThe one they call ā€˜Emil,’ howeverā€¦ā€

     An image of the handsome blonde man flashed through Ilona’s mind.

     ā€œHe’s a rotten scoundrel.  Took a bribe and made an unjust decision to save himself from discomfort.  Also quick to spout poetic compliments whenever he thinks it will help him get his way.  I don’t see much in him to admire…except for the fact that he is an excellent swordsman.ā€

     Ilona felt as if she had been slapped.  ā€œEmil isn’t like that,ā€ she protested.  ā€œHe has always been very courteous to me.ā€

     Horst lifted his head and gazed at Ilona, his eyes piercing through her.  ā€œWhy do you suppose that is?ā€

     Ilona opened her mouth and then shut it again.  She had known when her papa’s ball began that men would court her favor for selfish reasons.  But Emil, she thought, was different.  Her mind raced through every interaction she had with him, trying to find something to offer as proof of his indifference to her position.  Something with which she could convince everyone – including herself – that she had not been blind in her initial attraction.  But she found nothing.  Had even Emil’s attentions been an act?

     Tears came then.  And Ilona turned and ran.

Comments

  1. The descriptions...oh, those are great!! Wildcat of a warrior! Red-faced man...doesn't talk much. A rotten scoundrel. LOVE THEM!

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  2. Skye, you had figured out Emil was an idiot. And Detlef had figured it out. Ilona hadn't.
    Ilona was a little too passive of a heroine, and a little too slow to figure things out. It's one of those things that I'll change in the rewrite.

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  3. Oh right! XD
    I do like Ilona, she is just a little more trusting then I am.

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