|Chillon Castle dungeon via Pinterest|
These are two of the things I want to improve for my second draft of Dungeon: characters and wordiness.
My characters are full in my own head, but I am not sure they made it fully onto paper. Hatach, especially, needs a little more attention. I hadn't given him much attention early in the book because my princess doesn't give him much attention, but I may need to let the readers know more about him.
I also tend to explain things too much, I think. Part of it is the fact that I am frequently interrupted when I write. Part of it is my own desire to be very clear. But, somehow there is a way to be very clear without treating your readers like simpletons.